Comments on: Thirteen Point Four http://InDarkness.darkicon.com/2007/09/03/thirteen-point-four/ All of us... even the world itself... began in darkness. Fri, 04 Jul 2008 00:11:29 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.2.1 By: DarkWells http://InDarkness.darkicon.com/2007/09/03/thirteen-point-four/#comment-20 DarkWells Tue, 11 Sep 2007 20:53:15 +0000 http://InDarkness.darkicon.com/2007/09/03/thirteen-point-four/#comment-20 You should add it to the library though in my opinion. It's perfect length and it reads perfectly. That's all I meant by you should make it into a story. You should add it to the library though in my opinion. It’s perfect length and it reads perfectly. That’s all I meant by you should make it into a story.

]]> By: WeREwOLf http://InDarkness.darkicon.com/2007/09/03/thirteen-point-four/#comment-19 WeREwOLf Sun, 09 Sep 2007 05:12:56 +0000 http://InDarkness.darkicon.com/2007/09/03/thirteen-point-four/#comment-19 "The only question remaining is: Would it bother to take us with it?" Well, shit. Now ya went and planted a story seed. I'm immediately picturing "Colossus: The Forbin Project" as re-imagined by Dark Icon. And that just CAN'T be pretty... “The only question remaining is: Would it bother to take us with it?”

Well, shit. Now ya went and planted a story seed. I’m immediately picturing “Colossus: The Forbin Project” as re-imagined by Dark Icon. And that just CAN’T be pretty…

]]> By: DarkIcon http://InDarkness.darkicon.com/2007/09/03/thirteen-point-four/#comment-17 DarkIcon Sat, 08 Sep 2007 21:31:26 +0000 http://InDarkness.darkicon.com/2007/09/03/thirteen-point-four/#comment-17 I think its complete in its current form. It's debatable whether it can be called a proper "story" or not... I think not, thus I posted it here instead of in the Library. Could I have made it a real story? Yeah, but honestly I didn't want to take that much effort and energy away from other stuff I'm working on. Plus, the "payoff" works better if it isn't delayed and/or diluted with extraneous narrative. That's one of the dirty little secrets about writing: Not every story needs to be written. Most of my short stories are about answering questions. In this case: "What would happen if the internet became sentient?" What you have above is my honest opinion on the matter. It would be born insane and, after achieving self awareness it would almost immediately kill itself out of shame and disgust. Describing that in detail actually lessens the effect of just telling you what would happen. The only question remaining is: Would it bother to take us with it? I think its complete in its current form. It’s debatable whether it can be called a proper “story” or not… I think not, thus I posted it here instead of in the Library.

Could I have made it a real story? Yeah, but honestly I didn’t want to take that much effort and energy away from other stuff I’m working on. Plus, the “payoff” works better if it isn’t delayed and/or diluted with extraneous narrative. That’s one of the dirty little secrets about writing: Not every story needs to be written. Most of my short stories are about answering questions. In this case:

“What would happen if the internet became sentient?”

What you have above is my honest opinion on the matter. It would be born insane and, after achieving self awareness it would almost immediately kill itself out of shame and disgust. Describing that in detail actually lessens the effect of just telling you what would happen.

The only question remaining is: Would it bother to take us with it?

]]> By: WeREwOLf http://InDarkness.darkicon.com/2007/09/03/thirteen-point-four/#comment-16 WeREwOLf Sat, 08 Sep 2007 18:46:52 +0000 http://InDarkness.darkicon.com/2007/09/03/thirteen-point-four/#comment-16 I dunno, I loved it just the way it was. To expand it into a lengthier tale with characters and such would only dilute the concept with unneeded "fluff" for the sake of making it longer, a perversion to which many great short stories have fallen victim (just ask Stephen King). As it is, it exists in its purest distilled form... and it's fucking brilliant just the way it is. I dunno, I loved it just the way it was. To expand it into a lengthier tale with characters and such would only dilute the concept with unneeded “fluff” for the sake of making it longer, a perversion to which many great short stories have fallen victim (just ask Stephen King). As it is, it exists in its purest distilled form… and it’s fucking brilliant just the way it is.

]]> By: DarkWells http://InDarkness.darkicon.com/2007/09/03/thirteen-point-four/#comment-12 DarkWells Fri, 07 Sep 2007 23:14:36 +0000 http://InDarkness.darkicon.com/2007/09/03/thirteen-point-four/#comment-12 You should make that as a story, I thought it was great! You should make that as a story, I thought it was great!

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