New Story: Unofficial Report of the Pendleton Incident

There’s a new science fiction story in the library:

Unofficial Report of the Pendleton Incident is a short science fiction piece that I was gonna try to get published on one of those web ezine thingies. I guess they didn’t like it. The reasons they didn’t like it are pretty much the same reaosns I don’t care for it myself, but when you’re given a length restriction of 1000 words, there’s not a whole lot you can do. My stories have entire conversations that last 1000 words. One action sequence could be twice that… EASILY. When I’ve only got 1000 words, what you get is basically a summary of a story that I WOULD have told, instead of an actual full-length narrative. Oh well… makes no difference to me: instead of reading it somewhere else, you’re reading it here.

The story is very similar in tone to “DarkSpace,” which I’m giving away as a reward for February supporters. The stories aren’t related except for their tone and the fact that they both take place in the same possible future. Despite the similarities in the narrator’s tone and even word-choice in some places, the stories are told by two different people. “Pendleton Incident” was written first.



  1. WeREwOLf, February 4, 2008:

    1000 words for something Web-based? What, are those massive plain-text files hogging up their server space and bandwidth or somethin’? WTF.

    Anyway, interesting story, dig the premise, but yeah, it does feel unfortunately “condensed”, like a Reader’s Digest version of a longer story.

  2. DarkIcon, February 4, 2008:

    This one may end up getting rewritten into an “expanded” version of some kind… I dunno. On one hand, I hate to let someone ELSE’S restrictions cause me to essentially cripple a good story. On the other hand, it’s not like I’m hurting for ideas. Plus I’ve already posted this one so… what, am I gonna have two stories now?

    Hey, do one of you want to write it?

  3. WeREwOLf, February 5, 2008:

    Aww shee-it… I smell a writing competition. :D

  4. Loki, February 7, 2008:

    Actually DI, that is a good idea. Basically a person writes one half of story or a short story or something like that, and another finishes it or expands it. Could entertain us at the least.

  5. DarkIcon, February 7, 2008:

    An idea similar to this has been brought up before. My most recent comment about it was swallowed by a server hiccup, and I never re-wrote it. It was something to the effect that creating the code behind something like that would be a lot of fun and a lot of work, and I don’t see myself having the time to create it any time soon. This was, of course, assuming that I actually built some kind of PHP web application from scratch and didn’t simply use this blog and/or the Asylum Walls to do it.

    Since then, two things have occurred to me:

    1) I COULD just use this blog or the Asylum Walls to do it. ;)

    2) It’s already been done. I don’t know much about this project, but I did sign up for an account a few weeks ago. I’ve logged in once or twice. Looked around at some stuff other people wrote. Annnnd that’s about it. Nothing sparked enough interest to make me actually participate, although I did *think* about it once. Almost. I could start a story over there and people could jump on it, if they were interested. IS anyone interested?

  6. Loki, February 8, 2008:

    I know a *cough cough* bit of PHP/Perl/MySQL if ya want to do it by scratch. I would think its easier to use a forum of some kind. If you dont want to host it I could on my server. I think it would be a good idea.

  7. DarkIcon, February 8, 2008:

    I wouldn’t mind hosting it. Hell, I wouldn’t mind developing it except for not having the time.

    What lead me to think that developing something would be better than trying to shoehorn it into a blog or forum was the ability to have a chapter followed by X number of links, each link leading to a subsequent chapter written by a different author. Using a forum or blog would mean somebody has to hand-code those links… which isn’t anywhere near as cool as having them appear automatically in come kind of custom php app. Plus, doing that for more than one story simultaneously would be crazy. The StoryMash site I linked to has pretty much created the application I was thinking of… whether they wrote it themselves, found it online, or bought it, is an interesting question.

    Anyway, I agree that the concept is interesting. We could do a test run… use the Asylum Walls (and/or this blog) to create a collaborative story. If it turns out to be the greatest thing since grits*, then maybe invest the time in creating/buying/stealing a custom app for the next one.

    Anyone interested besides me and Loki (and presumably, Werewolf)?

    *A southern saying. Substitute “sliced bread” for “grits” if that works better. ;)

  8. Loki, February 9, 2008:

    Looks like you and me DI.:S

  9. DarkIcon, February 10, 2008:

    Well that sucks. We’ll see if anybody else comes along in the next couple of days, otherwise its not quite worth the effort. Need at least 3, I’d think.

  10. Loki, February 10, 2008:

    Okies…my msn is if ya find any more.

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